Missed her, not that
not that they’re close
not like that, remote.
Missed her, not sure
not too sure she’s real
not sure he is who he is.
Missed
EDC Writing – Believing Sight Unseen
'odd lines, short poems, bits of prose'
EDC Writing – Believing Sight Unseen
'odd lines, short poems, bits of prose'
Missed her, not that
not that they’re close
not like that, remote.
Missed her, not sure
not too sure she’s real
not sure he is who he is.
It’s easy to miss sb who’s not real.
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Worryingly easy sometimes
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I love how measured this is.
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Thanks, Basilike – a strange one this – I went for ‘not’ as a repeat word in the first verse and ‘sure’ in the second and ended up with ‘not’ there too – but as you say it measured up okay!
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It did. Sometimes the words want to do their own dance, and it turns out better than what we were thinking we wanted to do. It’s one of the things I love about writing.
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The way I dance it’s best I let the words lead!
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I think you don’t do yourself justice 🙂
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I like the beat of the words, and the way the first line in each verse evolves into the third.
Very well crafted Eric.
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Thank you very much, Roger – I enjoyed balancing simplicity with structure in this one.
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Certainly worked. Well done
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Oh, ambiguity, how sweet you are!
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Ambiguity – I have no words without it!
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