Would a grown man do it
write words as these and post it
this one did and knew it
she’d read and say he blew it
next time he’ll think twice about it
thing is she knows he’ll do it
It
EDC Writing – Believing Sight Unseen
'odd lines, short poems, bits of prose'
Will he?
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Yep!
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Great post 🙂
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I like this one poem very much, Eric.
“she’d read and say he blew it” I think she needs to read again 🙂
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Thank you, Gabriela – I think maybe she did …
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And?
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‘She’ hypothetical – not real as you…
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Am I real, Eric? Haha. Have a wonderful evening my dear friend.
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Ah ha, at least as real as I am – enjoy your lunch my friend.
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We’ll so 🙂
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*do
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After reading the commentary I now question my existence 😔
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You’re real ec I’ve never doubted it!
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Lol
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I like the way the word ‘it’ comes in at the end of each line, gives the poem a ‘beat’ adding a strong emphasis.
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Thanks, Roger – I’d like to say I planned it that way – truth is after two lines I was looking to remove the second ‘it’ then thought hang on lets go with it!
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Those ‘it’s are the solidity of the message. Glad you to decided to keep them in.
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Cleverly written my friend! 👍🖤
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Sometimes we can’t help it.
And sometimes they love it.
Though they’ll never admit it.
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Isn’t that the truth of it!
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🙂
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Great poem!
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