How do you feel today …
His:
How do you feel today? Your choice made, down to you, to be without me, happy to be young and carefree, moving on to suit your will? Smiling, knowing you’ll always be wanted, needed, in every way, by someone, your choice always, who you’ll let near. Every flaw, every fault of mine, magnified on here, every hope every feeling for you etched into my heart. You to me reality, the finality of desire, the ever present of my mind, the pearl of every tear, unforgettable, untouchable by me. And so, your choice for me to go, reluctantly accepted, my would be lover, the darling of my body heart and soul.
Hers:
Well that’s a lovely way of summing up everything, if it were true. I don’t see why you need to go, it’s not my choice, it’s one you’ve made, for whatever reason? Don’t you think it unfair that I don’t hear from you for weeks and then you make out that I’ve not missed you, that I don’t want you. What exactly did you want me to say, did you really think I was just going to hang around and pine for you? I tell you, I’m disappointed in you, I thought you knew me?
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His & Hers – raw lines extracted from ‘Believing Sight Unseen’ a file of what was a quarter of a million words – now culled to about a hundred and fifty thousand – so many repetitions when a man and woman talk.
‘Believing Sight Unseen: Their Days’ the first book, ‘Sam & Erin’s Story’ evolved from this file – around thirty-five thousand words – to be published this Spring.
Further ‘His & Hers’ stories to come – believe me.
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Amazing 💞💞 Followed u 🙂
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Good to know you like this … and thank you for the follow.
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It’s amazing how sometimes people can be in such different places about what happens between them. Good luck with your publication!
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Ah that’s the essence of almost everything I write … the misunderstanding of a man and woman’s words … thanks for the ‘Good luck’ I’ve still a lot to do!
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Culling the complicated conversation between a man and a woman is no easy feat!
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Exactly Pam … if I had to think about it I kept their words … it was the endless repetitions of much the same things that were easy to get rid of … as were my early delves into the explicit … I found the implicit so much more intriguing.
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so many words saying the same thing. your lines tell of a story that has seen many scenes and takes, never perfected just like real life, you have my attention.
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Thank you, you read me well!
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